I love how this drops us into the rubble of a seemingly-unfixable afterwards, then leaves us to grapple with the complexity of a moral-immorality.
Where other commenters want more writing, it’s the detached & numb rationality vs. the unregulated emotional volatility that makes this a perfect stopping point for me. The just-right conclusion where we begin to understand the invasion, the invaders, and the victims…. while also questioning if, perhaps, the victims include more than just earthlings.
I’ll be thinking about this one for a long time! Thanks for writing and sharing!
You did such a great job with the protagonist's inner monologue. It maintained his matter-of-fact journalistic viewpoint but added a subtle layer of emotion and reflection that really elevated not only the character but the piece overall. That last scene with the invader was 10/10. Really terrific work!
Really nicely written - great language and economy. I think I see Cormac McCarthy and Vonnegut lurking around in there somewhere, though maybe you won't take that as a compliment depending on your tastes haha.
Would like to know how Connecticut made out. Hartford could use an overhaul anyway...
This is a great line
"Countless choices made for the choiceless, you and me, the choiceless who are always first to die."
Why don't presidents fight the war? Why do they always send the poor?
Who are always alive... per say.
Hits all my spots...dystopian post alien invasion. gritty atmosphere runs through it. obviously want a whole novel if this please.
This is excellent. Is there more available?
Consider self publishing a full novel. Ever read ‘The Last Tribe’ by Brad Manuel? He did it and so can you. Carry on.
Thank you! It's something I am considering for sure
BTW, Manuel’s book contains many chapters that take place in Boston and surrounding area.
this is fabulous
Thank you!! :D
I love how this drops us into the rubble of a seemingly-unfixable afterwards, then leaves us to grapple with the complexity of a moral-immorality.
Where other commenters want more writing, it’s the detached & numb rationality vs. the unregulated emotional volatility that makes this a perfect stopping point for me. The just-right conclusion where we begin to understand the invasion, the invaders, and the victims…. while also questioning if, perhaps, the victims include more than just earthlings.
I’ll be thinking about this one for a long time! Thanks for writing and sharing!
Thank you, Tiffany, feels like you saw the wavelength I was reaching for. Means a lot
So well done. More please!
Thank you! There might be more coming on this
fantastic work, brother. will be reading more
Thanks man, I really appreciate that
This is so good! Never read anything like this before, in a good way. Your narration has such a nice rhythm and tone, well done!
Thank you! V glad you liked it
Remarkable, friend. Achieved something significant here, I believe.
Thanks man, this means a very great deal coming from you
Well written creative piece. I enjoyed reading it.
Thank you for reading!
You did such a great job with the protagonist's inner monologue. It maintained his matter-of-fact journalistic viewpoint but added a subtle layer of emotion and reflection that really elevated not only the character but the piece overall. That last scene with the invader was 10/10. Really terrific work!
Thank you, I'm a fan of your work so this means a lot
Really nicely written - great language and economy. I think I see Cormac McCarthy and Vonnegut lurking around in there somewhere, though maybe you won't take that as a compliment depending on your tastes haha.
Would like to know how Connecticut made out. Hartford could use an overhaul anyway...
Thanks for reading Dave, much appreciated. As for Connecticut, more on that soon perhaps…
Like, it. This is HG Wells terrirory, a dystopia for our times.
Perhaps the invader is AI?!
Lol
I love this started as a dream. I can almost see you writing it. Would love to see the dreamer become a character!
That was very depressing and the last bit shows how inhumane humans can become.